tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post4576096626262611421..comments2023-12-11T04:28:04.590-06:00Comments on Dream Mom: The Saga of Baby Toby: The ConclusionDream Momhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18351348027973964625noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-80287897229432976492007-03-08T17:00:00.000-06:002007-03-08T17:00:00.000-06:00I agree with anonymous just before me. The 'soulma...I agree with anonymous just before me. The 'soulmate' stuff that the mom emphasizes over and over again does not convince me. If she had been confused at Tom's suddenly changed behavior, I might believe it. But Tom not telling her this story does not ring true for a marriage between two people who love each other without bounds and are committed for life. He would tell it to her probably from theAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-15456244933999289772007-03-05T05:44:00.000-06:002007-03-05T05:44:00.000-06:00This was a wonderful story. I think the ending wa...This was a wonderful story. I think the ending was very moving and surprising as well. Yeah, I've always liked O'Henry although sometimes it all ties up rather tooo neatly in the end. <BR/><BR/>This definitely has short story appeal, I think a few more of these could be bound and published. But I'd like a bit more on the characters as well, the mother could be fleshed out a bit more, as could Prof Kim Gutschowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07128273953353506480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-31379830628760853342007-03-02T14:29:00.000-06:002007-03-02T14:29:00.000-06:00This is a classic story of a woman being emotional...This is a classic story of a woman being emotionally abused and the coping mechanisms involved. <BR/><BR/>Everyone has sorrow, pain and secrets. I hope that sooner rather than later the mother realizes that there is no excuse for how Tom treats her. <BR/><BR/>K.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-64779883339961420642007-03-02T12:18:00.000-06:002007-03-02T12:18:00.000-06:00I loved this story, both your side and ex-utero's....I loved this story, both your side and ex-utero's. But, unlike, apparently, most readers, I can't find it in me to be sympathetic to Tom. You've made him too much of a bully for me to have any sympathy even knowing the background trauma.<BR/><BR/>I can't believe that a man who was even vaguely interested in his son's birth would go out of town when his wife was two weeks past due. It seems like Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-85166876293800897892007-03-02T12:09:00.000-06:002007-03-02T12:09:00.000-06:00Nicely done!Nicely done!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-50767804032750306582007-03-02T12:00:00.000-06:002007-03-02T12:00:00.000-06:00Wow, awesome story!Wow, awesome story!katehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16536809590856333391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-70231447766641466642007-03-02T11:34:00.000-06:002007-03-02T11:34:00.000-06:00I'm just guessing here, but I bet that the focus s...I'm just guessing here, but I bet that the focus shifted to the husband because Toby is doing fine.<BR/><BR/>Chris and Vic--I think you should write your own story. Sounds like you could also write an interesting one.<BR/><BR/>Dream Mom, I would challenge you to write a pretend journal (or blog) of Toby's progress from the time he left the hospital until his six month mark. That way if you and Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-80771690968794586072007-03-02T09:57:00.000-06:002007-03-02T09:57:00.000-06:00I have some questions:How/why did the focus shift ...I have some questions:<BR/><BR/>How/why did the focus shift from Toby to Tom? You developed, especially with your O'Henry ending, a great deal of sympathy for Tom.<BR/> <BR/>There is a cultural attitude about litigation---that it will make up for insult in the case of a medical mistake---that you have reinforced with your story. At least that is my interpretation--that litigiousness is okay and Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-6518896014313999902007-03-02T08:44:00.000-06:002007-03-02T08:44:00.000-06:00Very good! I enjoyed reading this. Thank you!Very good! I enjoyed reading this. Thank you!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-42174720671479978222007-03-02T02:43:00.000-06:002007-03-02T02:43:00.000-06:00I agree with SaraBeth..BRAVO!I agree with SaraBeth..BRAVO!Cathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13540096932312929506noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-84685406847066636132007-03-02T02:21:00.000-06:002007-03-02T02:21:00.000-06:00This was an amazing story from start to finish, bu...This was an amazing story from start to finish, but the ending was really, really surprising. I also want to know what happens to Toby later on. Might you and Ex Utero consider a sequel?abbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03403145277760263562noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-73066071949173312512007-03-01T23:45:00.000-06:002007-03-01T23:45:00.000-06:00A lovely story! I had me wanting to read more aft...A lovely story! I had me wanting to read more after each installment. You guys make a great writing team! Great job!Awesome Momhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03523320907836876707noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-59586749868298827772007-03-01T23:21:00.000-06:002007-03-01T23:21:00.000-06:00I'm so glad that Ex Utero didn't share the story w...I'm so glad that Ex Utero didn't share the story with me while ya'll were writing it. What a shocker!<BR/><BR/>I want more. I want to know what happens with the lawsuit. I want to know how Toby is doing later. <BR/><BR/>Oh, bravo, Dream Mom. BravoSarabethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05044786582426844753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-76541017288342198562007-03-01T22:54:00.000-06:002007-03-01T22:54:00.000-06:00What a fantastic story. Well written! You two shou...What a fantastic story. Well written! You two should publish this as a short story.Shawneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05078899556763453729noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22370535.post-22885544513112344182007-03-01T22:49:00.000-06:002007-03-01T22:49:00.000-06:00how very sad... beatifully written. Ya'll did an ...how very sad... beatifully written. Ya'll did an amazing job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com